Day 799: Penelope advice

Penelope helped me tremendously with the field sanitation chapter this morning.  I had been pretty satisfied with it until I read out loud to them.  That is such an important step in the editing process.  I felt myself getting bogged down in the stories and they weren't nearly as funny as I imagined them.  While I read, I listened to their responses.  A few titters and a couple snorts.  That was it.  I also picked up on repeated phrases and rhythms.

One of the problems I asked them to consider was about how and where to place the Leave No Trace principles.  They are woven through the entire book, but I thought they fit as the foundation for field sanitation since they provide bathroom guidelines along with personal hygiene.   I've also included a portion in with expedition behavior as they relate to trail etiquette, trash disposal and interaction with wildlife.

Several ladies suggested taking both chapters and laying out all the pages on the floor or table and reorganizing them.  That's what I will do.  I think two chapters will become three.  They also suggested cutting down on the number of stories and tightening them up.  That's hard for me because the anecdotes make Quest real. They represent the experiences of my family, friends and students.

Late this afternoon, one of our adult leaders came to see us to let us know that he will have to cut back on his participation in Quest.  His wife's cancer is advancing and the governor has called upon him to step up his presence in western NY.  It's going to be so difficult for him to reconcile his many responsibilities.  We are so sorry for him and his family.

We made progress on the kitchen set and on the train car.  Emma and her dad came to help today and they were very helpful.  Steve also finished the front door set so it can be painted tomorrow  along with the tv frame set.  Emma promised to get other cast members to pitch in on the painting.  Most of it must be done this week since we need to paint the stage next Sunday.